I was asking for crits and I'm not mad :3 If anything I don't get enough of that so I'm left in the dark about how I should imrpove.
So here's my response.
'I don't want to say that you need to change the names per se, but one thing of advice I give you in general is: more doesn't me better. This is something that I see in character design a lot, for example. You'll see characters with detailed and complicates looks, but if they don't have somewhat of a meaning behind it. It's like trying to cover something in glitter and saying its art, if that makes sense.'
So I named them as they are due to the language of the culture. In all reality their names are not as short as I listed. In Ironian , each letter is actually a 'word' so the name 'Iblis' for example would spell out its full name in Ironian being I B L I S (insert words from language to letters lol) so they're actually shortened. And some of the names are long regardless as some are actual words, just spelt differently for how it would be used in Ironian. I try to keep the names short but they're kinda hard. I do plan on making a guide as to how to say their names though xD Like Zellennaa. ZELL-LEE-NAH
Or Zarrexx CZAR-REX-EX It is in a way a forigen laguage from another planet. So it's not long for glittery purposes or more just for more, it's an actual lexicon that requires some understanding of the culture to know why the names seem wonky. Just like how a english name can sound totally normal to us, is bizarre for japanese people and vice versa. And they do have meaning for each name in the story, I don't just throw out random words/letters ;D
lol and don't fret, if you don't feel like you understand something I'm more than happy to lend a ear. It's A LOT to take in. I've worked on this for about 11 years total, so it may seem super complicated out of the fact you know nothing about this world I'm making. I can break down things too if needed, I just wrote them as self notes. I know how to simplify them further if you'd like.
Oooh, I'd have to say my favorites would be Shoto, Dabi, Bakugou, Kurogiri, Shigaraki, Kirishima, Hero Killer Stain- All of the hot boys, pretty much. (My list is longer, but I'll bore you to tears if I name all of them.)
Hey! Thanks so much for the follow! I really appreciate it, dude! So I'm not the only one who has a special place in my heart for MHA! Sweet! Even though you don't like it as much now, who was your favorite character?
Sounds like fun it does. I dunno about the talking part though ^^; I'm kind of shy when it comes to that sort of thing.
Hey, know this is uber random but, would you be interested in helping have a secondary view on some of my writing? I've made a few different posts around the site with my writing stuff. I'm kinda bored and looking to conversate, I simply don't know how to really relate to much of anything xD That and I feel like I keep making an ass outta myself/
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I was asking for crits and I'm not mad :3 If anything I don't get enough of that so I'm left in the dark about how I should imrpove.
So here's my response.
'I don't want to say that you need to change the names per se, but one thing of advice I give you in general is: more doesn't me better. This is something that I see in character design a lot, for example. You'll see characters with detailed and complicates looks, but if they don't have somewhat of a meaning behind it. It's like trying to cover something in glitter and saying its art, if that makes sense.'
So I named them as they are due to the language of the culture. In all reality their names are not as short as I listed. In Ironian , each letter is actually a 'word' so the name 'Iblis' for example would spell out its full name in Ironian being I B L I S (insert words from language to letters lol) so they're actually shortened. And some of the names are long regardless as some are actual words, just spelt differently for how it would be used in Ironian. I try to keep the names short but they're kinda hard. I do plan on making a guide as to how to say their names though xD Like Zellennaa. ZELL-LEE-NAH
Or Zarrexx CZAR-REX-EX It is in a way a forigen laguage from another planet. So it's not long for glittery purposes or more just for more, it's an actual lexicon that requires some understanding of the culture to know why the names seem wonky. Just like how a english name can sound totally normal to us, is bizarre for japanese people and vice versa. And they do have meaning for each name in the story, I don't just throw out random words/letters ;D
lol and don't fret, if you don't feel like you understand something I'm more than happy to lend a ear. It's A LOT to take in. I've worked on this for about 11 years total, so it may seem super complicated out of the fact you know nothing about this world I'm making. I can break down things too if needed, I just wrote them as self notes. I know how to simplify them further if you'd like.
Oooh, I'd have to say my favorites would be Shoto, Dabi, Bakugou, Kurogiri, Shigaraki, Kirishima, Hero Killer Stain- All of the hot boys, pretty much. (My list is longer, but I'll bore you to tears if I name all of them.)
Hey! Thanks so much for the follow! I really appreciate it, dude! So I'm not the only one who has a special place in my heart for MHA! Sweet! Even though you don't like it as much now, who was your favorite character?
I'll totally take a peek at yours too.
Just go into general discussion. Here's the links for easy access.
https://www.anime-planet.com/forum/threads/legacy-of-zellennaa-power-circle-concept-etc.339210/#post-2251584
This is a start for you as it's a lot to take in xD;;;
Sounds like fun it does. I dunno about the talking part though ^^; I'm kind of shy when it comes to that sort of thing.
Hey, know this is uber random but, would you be interested in helping have a secondary view on some of my writing? I've made a few different posts around the site with my writing stuff. I'm kinda bored and looking to conversate, I simply don't know how to really relate to much of anything xD That and I feel like I keep making an ass outta myself/