Priscilla's Marriage Proposal
Nov 9, 2020Couldnt get my self to like this to be honnest, the story was to much about her past and its a big flaw in stories like this where they focus to much in the past thats irrelevant now after they gone back in time.
Also the mercenairy she offers diamond mine and and everything to, the one who already owe her dead father a great debht doesnt make sense at all, a guy gets so much help and the one time he can pay back the debht he literally robbs the MC blind????
Also before she went back in time she let her whole area fall to ruin and did nothing to stop it even though she understod the consept if you use money and go broke things go bad, so if she is so amazingly stupid its hard to hold a handle for her, as she already proven she dont got much og a brain to use sadly.
As a last thing to point out, the stepmother spesificly loves jewels, gold and hems, so if she made such a big land go bankrupt because of her spending on those items it wouldnt been a problem, as gold,gems and emeralds dont lose value, so even if the MC sold all the stuff her stepmum had brought they could easly played back the debht, even if they sold them cheap as the land ut self gets taxes from the public, so its impossible to lose money unless the stepmum was addicted to consumable stuff that can be resold, but that wasnt the case, she brought jewels and crap with dont lose value.
So all in all nothing in this story makes sense, you could say the mercenairy thing made sense as as him being a worse guy than the stepmum and the fiance before time loop, but the writer is trying to make the mercenairy the good guy, so got no bloody idea why he would make him robb the MC so badly.
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"the story was to much about her past..." I didn't feel like it was too much about the past, sure there was quite a lot of exposision at the beggining but it doesn't come back later.
"Also the mercenairy she offers diamond mine and and everything" Like you said, the merceneray(I'll call him Kian from now) has a debt towards her father. But that's just it, it's for one to her father, there's also the fact that nobody will do something for free unless they can help it. Thus I'd say it's fair compensation, since they are after all mercenaries.
"Also before she went back in time she let her whole area fall to ruin" To be honest this point is kind of a null point. Since while she knew that her land was going into ruin she didn't have any power, and not enough information to do anything. It's not that she's dumb but limited in her actions(plus trauma).
"even if the MC sold all the stuff her stepmum had brought they could easly played back the debht," This was explained that the items were sold way above market price, thus even if she sold it there wouldn't be enough to pay it off, since the price she'd sell it for would be below the one debt they incurred.
For the conclusion, I am so confused... he isn't painted in a particularly bad light in either the flashbacks or afterwards. Also the mine she uses top pay with is undeveloped, and developing mines is both difficult and costly, as such she couldn't use it in another way even if she wanted to.