AquaLilly2943

STORY:

The plot isn't bad per se, but it just felt all over the place. It kept jumping around the timeline instead keeping it mainstream throughout. I honestly don't mind the occasional backstory montague, but every other chapter was a montague and it felt like the author was just trying add fluff/filler cause they didn't have enough to write or just arranged the stories as they wrote them. As though they were being harassed by their publisher to crank out the next chapter so they just kept giving disjointed backstory.

Minor Spoiler

It would have been a better story if they had started the story at the chapter 10 backstory montague and then had the FMC wake up, get kidnapped along the way as they tried to get their shit together, and then meet the MMC. This about sums up the main timeline from chapter 1 - 11; half of it was background stuff that could have been sprinkled in WAY later. It just felt too soon.

ART:

Not bad, not great, but it's not showing off in way, shape, or form. It doesn't do anything dynamic with the story to warrant anything detailed.

CHARACTERS:

Again, not bad, not great, but the story isn't really doing anything with them. All the FMC has done is literally throw herself at the poor guy - albeit, she's doing it out if self preservation cause they don't speak the same language and sex is universal no matter how you slice it - and all the MMC does is flail around, give mixer signals - granted, he gave a vow of chasity and is (mostly) as pure as the driven snow, but come on! You can't tell me ONE woman hasn't made you pubescent hormones go off-, and yell at her DISPITE KNOWING THAT SHE CAN'T UNDERSTAND A DAMN WORD HE IS SAYING! Just - oh my gosh is it frustrating to watch these two dance around each other with no real rhythm and no chemistry except for hormones is beyond irritating.

OVERALL:

So, overall, nothing is up to snuff because the writing is subpar. It could all be better but the writer just seems to be phoning it in.