Content Warning: Suicide
This isn't a very good story. And it's not because the subject matter is offputting or anything like that. I can handle stories about suicide. It's just that this particular suicide-related story is too simplistic and bland to be entertaining. The two characters are nondescript, with only slight indications of them being damaged in some way, and there isn't enough time within this handful of pages for me to get emotionally invested in them. I think the hook is supposed to come from readers realizing they were misconceiving the nature of the events, the twist as it were (though, it's not as though what was happening was particularly hidden), but it just felt lame to me.