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[cassiesheepgirl]

Originally Posted by lews

Stamina's run out on me, boys. Will write more later and revise anything yeh think be needing revising.

And girls hee hee ;)

Hi lews, I'd like to make a few more comments to help you improve, but alas, it is gone 1am and I have a double shift at work tomorrow. However, for the moment, one thing that I would like to point out is that sometimes you seem to slip into review mode rather than synopsis mode - just something to think about in the mean time.

Particular examples of this are:

"The story tells not only about their hopes and despairs, but also about the inner workings of Shounen Jump and what it takes to become the biggest in Japan."

(You need to try and convey what the story is about without having to blatently say it. Avoid referring to "the story", or "the series" etc.)

"The tension intensifies as Hiro realizes that he might yet have feelings for Hikari,"

(It's the "the tension intensifies" part here that says review. This can be changed with rewording, I dunno like, "when Hiro realises that he might yet have feelings for Hikari, his childhood friend who also happens to be dating Hideo, their rivalry deepens" or whatever fits with the manga.)

"It comes down to a duel"

("It comes down to" is more like a review, if one challenges the other to a duel maybe say that instead like "But when x challenges y to a duel the stakes are high" or something, that's just an example of how you can work around it - and add a bit of flair at the same time.)

Hope this helps a little, I'll try to give some more feedback tomorrow, but for now, I must sleep as I'm having to re-type words about 3 or 4 times. >.<

[jaysah925]

X-Day

Synopsis:

Rika Saginuma had it all: good looks, high grades, and is the star athlete in her school’s high jump. But behind the scenes, she’s suffering from depression and heartache. That’s when she meets three other people who each have their own reasons why they hate their school. And so, with an unlikely friendship formed, they planned on blowing up the school that gave them nothing but pain and anguish. Thus starts the countdown to X-day.

Tags:
drama, psychological, school life, romance

this is my first submission, so feel free to correct me if there's some typos or anything that needs revising ^^

[sothis]

Originally Posted by Bloodyred

Hows that?

Futaba-kun Change

Futaba Shimeru is living a normal life as a high school boy. He has a crush on a female classmate Misaki, and is active in his school's wrestling club. The only problem is that his family never told him about his family's hereditary genetic. Anyone in his family gets upset or stressed they change genders. Futaba Shimeru can't control his emotions and makes him switch gender when he gets excited or stressed and always seems to be in the wrong places when it happens. Can Futaba Shimeru keep his secret for long?

Tag: Gender Bender, Action, Comedy, Romance

it sounds good, but it's still missing some examples of what happens... as the manga is a full 8 volumes, this synopsis seems far too superficial and needs more meat about what happens and what crazy antics he gets himself into.

as a note, how much have you read of this?

[chamomille]

Bara no Tameni - Akemi Yoshimura

After being dumped by her boyfriend and after the sudden death of her grandmother, Yuri is left alone, desperate, with no place to go. At that time she finds out that her mother still lives and that she is even a famous actress. Yuri's new life begins. She moves to her mother's house where she meets her new sister and two brothers and soon ends up falling in love with her elder brother. The problem is that Yuri is short, fat, she has pickles all over her face and she lacks self-confidence while her siblings are thin, beautifull and awfully arrogant. Can they get along with each other? Can Yuri's love be ever requited? What is the true relationship between them?

tags: shoujo, romance, drama

(won Shogakukan Manga Award in 1994)

as for manga like Basara, Ayashi no ceres, Nana, Hana Yori Dango (all great shoujo manga)..why can't be used the synopsis written for anime?
well, Hana Yori Dango manga differs from anime a little but the other three manga are almost the same as anime..
i don't get it, but i haven't posted here for longer time so i may have missed something..

[Noriko]

I have a some:

Chu Chu Chu

synopsis:

Kojima Mitsu is in high school, but she's so small that she looks like she's in elementary school! One day while she is is changing into a maid uniform for a school event - with not much success...the uniform is too big for her - she finds a little bat blocked by the window and helps it. Suddenly an awesome guy appears in front of her! He is a vampire and as thanks for saving his "toy," he helps turn her into an adult...with a kiss!

Tags: Supernatural, Shoujo, Romance, Fantasy, Comedy


Help!!

synopsis:

Kousaka Shin's ultimate dream is to become a doctor. So despite the facts that she is a cry baby, a coward, has a baby face, and only has an A cup--she is much more passionate about persuing her goals than others. One day her teacher, Abe-sensei, tells her she is not fit to be a doctor. From then on, a battle between them begins. There's an added twist! Abe-sensei and Shin are neighbors! Now, her journey to becoming a doctor will be even more difficult than imagined!

Tags: Shoujo, Romance, Drama, teacher-student relationships


It's Not Like That, Darling

synopsis:

Maiko Ninomiya is college freshman again this year! All because of the accident a year ago that put her in the hospital for half a year. Not to let the fact that she was held back a year dishearten her, she made a complete recovery. But recently she keeps seeing dreams about having passionate sex. On top of that after meeting novelist Yukiya Nagase, strange things keep happening!? The popular mysterious love comedy will make your heart and body hot!

tags: Josei, Drama, Comedy

[sothis]

Originally Posted by chamomille

Bara no Tameni - Akemi Yoshimura

After being dumped by her boyfriend and after the sudden death of her grandmother, Yuri is left alone, desperate, with no place to go. At that time she finds out that her mother still lives and that she is even a famous actress. Yuri's new life begins. She moves to her mother's house where she meets her new sister and two brothers and soon ends up falling in love with her elder brother. The problem is that Yuri is short, fat, she has pickles all over her face and she lacks self-confidence while her siblings are thin, beautifull and awfully arrogant. Can they get along with each other? Can Yuri's love be ever requited? What is the true relationship between them?

tags: shoujo, romance, drama

(won Shogakukan Manga Award in 1994)

as for manga like Basara, Ayashi no ceres, Nana, Hana Yori Dango (all great shoujo manga)..why can't be used the synopsis written for anime?
well, Hana Yori Dango manga differs from anime a little but the other three manga are almost the same as anime..
i don't get it, but i haven't posted here for longer time so i may have missed something..

great start! so the main bit of feedback i'd have is the ending - three questions is too much. i've found that people sometimes do multiple questions because they are trying to hint at many things that happen, but be careful if it ends up being spoilerish. for example, because you say 'what is the true relationship between them', i obviously know now that things arent what they appear to be. if this is osmething the reader should know, great. but if it's something that would be a spoiler for a twist/etc, it should be left out.

i think the other two questions are very general and not a great way to end it either, though i'm not sure what would be better. maybe a statement instead about what quarrels or conflicts she gets into?

[chamomille]

Originally Posted by sothis

great start! so the main bit of feedback i'd have is the ending - three questions is too much. i've found that people sometimes do multiple questions because they are trying to hint at many things that happen, but be careful if it ends up being spoilerish. for example, because you say 'what is the true relationship between them', i obviously know now that things arent what they appear to be. if this is osmething the reader should know, great. but if it's something that would be a spoiler for a twist/etc, it should be left out.

hmm, you are right..this question should be left out..

i think the other two questions are very general and not a great way to end it either, though i'm not sure what would be better. maybe a statement instead about what quarrels or conflicts she gets into?

as for the other two questions..well i think i would leave it this way..as there are in fact two main motives - the family relationships (i would even say there are some incest elements) and the fact that Yuri is fat and ugly unlike her siblings..so first, they don't like her but soon both her brothers start to find her cute in some way..
or i could end it like this..

"After being dumped by her boyfriend and after the sudden death of her grandmother, Yuri is left alone, desperate, with no place to go. At that time she finds out that her mother still lives and that she is even a famous actress. Yuri's new life begins. She moves to her mother's house where she meets her new sister and two brothers. The problem is that Yuri is short, fat, she has pickles all over her face and she lacks self-confidence while her siblings are thin, beautifull and awfully arrogant. But it doesn't prevent Yuri from falling in love with her elder brother who changes when he is drunk into a kind person and often ends sleeping in her bed."

[Sheila]

I'll try to help as well... Though this will need some language corrections

Aisuru Hito

Synopsis
Sakiko Kinoshita is an ordinary college student. She is 20 years old and she is in love with university professor Chifuyu. Although she is trying pretty hard to capture his heart, she is always turned down. Sakiko’s quite depressed when she finds out, that her mother wants to move, yet she doesn’t give up and tries to earn money to pay her tutions. She even tries to sell herself on the street. However her price is too high, that noone wants to pay it. Then a handsome boy named Natsuo appears, kisses her and offered to buy her. Sakiko agreed and is taken to Natsuo’s apartment. She’s determined to do her best, when they’re suddenly interrupted… by Natsuo’s older brother: Chifuyu! Well, that’s how the weird love triangle between Sakiko and two brother started… but how will it end?

Tags: Love triangle, Ecchi, and maybe Explicit Sex would fit as well

Vols: 4 (completed)

[sothis]

Originally Posted by Sheila

I'll try to help as well... Though this will need some language corrections

Aisuru Hito

Synopsis
Sakiko Kinoshita is an ordinary college student. She is 20 years old and she is in love with university professor Chifuyu. Although she is trying pretty hard to capture his heart, she is always turned down. Sakiko’s quite depressed when she finds out, that her mother wants to move, yet she doesn’t give up and tries to earn money to pay her tutions. She even tries to sell herself on the street. However her price is too high, that noone wants to pay it. Then a handsome boy named Natsuo appears, kisses her and offered to buy her. Sakiko agreed and is taken to Natsuo’s apartment. She’s determined to do her best, when they’re suddenly interrupted… by Natsuo’s older brother: Chifuyu! Well, that’s how the weird love triangle between Sakiko and two brother started… but how will it end?

Tags: Love triangle, Ecchi, and maybe Explicit Sex would fit as well

Vols: 4 (completed)

so i looked up this one and noticed it has a smut tag... i'm not sure how to handle this, does that tag mean it's basically hentai?

[Sheila]

Originally Posted by sothis

so i looked up this one and noticed it has a smut tag... i'm not sure how to handle this, does that tag mean it's basically hentai?

Well... I wouldn't consider it hentai, though it has some parts like that...