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Join Date: May 2002
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hi charlie, this is a great start! the only thing that needs to be changed is you have a lot of 'personal opinion' type statements in there... specifically, 'these stories are based on' or 'more detail into'. basically a synopsis should describe the story, but not in a third person type sense... it should just describe the events like a movie announcer would. so you could just put a swing on this like 'from following trainers such as Red who dreams to be the strongest trainer, to Gold who needs to find all of his family's lost Pokemon, to discovering the reasons behind Deoxys and Mewtwo's creations, there's many adventures to be had in the world of [is there a world name?] let me know if how i described the last part is accurate - if so, ill edit the first part and use it :)
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Narumon Z
Join Date: Aug 2008
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I was amazed by some of the good mangas that haven't got a synopsis yet so I figured I'd try my hand at creating some. This will be my first time attempting such a feat so please give me as much advice as possible so that I can focus on what needs to be improved, removed, or added.
Living Game Genre: Comedy, Romance, Seinen, Slice of Life Author / Artist: HOSHISATO Mochiru Progress: Complete – Volume 10, Chapter 12 Year Started: 1990 Raizou Fuwa, a worker for Nakafumi DM Service, makes his living in the overcrowded Tokyo of 1990. Space is a valuable commodity and with Raizou tripping over himself in his apartment, he decides to break free and move to a larger one. This sparks a chain of brighter events with news that the cramped office he works at is relocating to a different building along with getting another employee. Unfortunately, the good news turns to bad as an earthquake renders their building dangerous, Raizou’s apartment becomes the new office, and the new employee is Izumi Hiyama, a 15 year old girl, that he needs to take care of. While living in a more confined space, Raizou must deal with his peronsal and professional life being blended into one. Last edited by Zakiel; 01-04-2009 at 08:52 PM. |
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Join Date: May 2002
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liquid, does that ring true to you at all? if so, any chance you can have a second try, talking more about the manga as a whole, rather than just the beginning? it doesnt have to be spoilertastic, but if something happens early on it's worth talking about.
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Narumon Z
Join Date: Aug 2008
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Thats not a problem at all as I was wondering just how far things needed to be covered. I designed that synopsis to focus on the beginning chapter as it wouldn't reveal anything significant yet still give a basis to how the series flowed. Izumi was an example of that as I didn't know how much I wanted to reveal about her relationship Raizou such as sleeping arrangements, how they progress, and so forth.
A couple things I'd like to ask though would be how far is a general measure of what a synopsis should cover. There are a lot of main characters that flow around the series and getting through all of them would turn this into an essay. His ex always visiting is something that I should have included since she has a great presence throughout the manga (and especially early on) and I can probably make a subtle hint as to Raizou changing to different apartments throughout the series. Oh and the other question I was wondering about is if anything else needed work on the synopsis besides it being too general. |
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Narumon Z
Join Date: Mar 2008
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Ok so you said you're looking for some feed back right?
Well I have some feed back on some of the synopsis. Mx0: I love the second one, though it spends a little too much time summing up the first few chapters. Also the second isn't quite as informative as the first, but the first is too wordy. Double Arts: It's worded awkwardly and doesn't tell me anything about the characters. Besides Kiri isn't unremarkable, his idea of cute is remarkable by itself, let alone his sense of fashion. Bleach: There are quite a few grammar and spelling issues and it's worded awkwardly. Chibi Vampire Karin: The first synopsis is great, the second summarizes the story to much, and the third is just...really, really weird... Last edited by Zakiel; 01-09-2009 at 01:31 PM. Reason: mispelling |
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Et Cetera
No. of Volumes: 9 Et Cetera is an Action/comedy manga set in the Wild West and revolves around the two main characters, Mingchao and Baskerville. Mingchao is a Chinese girl who’s main goal in life is to get to Hollywood to become a star, and who’s only relative, her Grandpa died leaving Mingchao a mysterious weapon that he made himself called the Eto Gun. Travelling with her is the priest known as Baskerville, or simply Mr. Priest to Mingchao, who while he says he is a simple traveling missionary, there seems to be a bit more to him than meets the eye. Together they travel across the Wild West, trying (but failing) to avoid trouble while attempting to understand the puzzling Eto Gun. Tags:Action, Comedy, Journey to the west(?) -------------------- Remote No. of Volumes: 10 Kurumi Ayaki is a traffic cop ready to give up work once she got married, but is forced to return to her job to help pay for her wedding. However, when she returns to work, instead of going back to her old job, she is enlisted to help crack a serial murder case! The case that she is working on is particularly tricky, and the police force has had to call in a special detective - a master at solving cases - but incredibly anti-social. The detective’s name is Kōzaburō Himuro and it is Kurumi’s job to help him track down whoever is committing these crimes. Tags: Action, Mystery, Panty shots, Romance(?) Note, I have only read one volume of the above series, I cannot remember if you have to have read the whole series or not to make a recommendation. |
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I don't know if its already in the topic (Its not in the database for sure) so I will just post it... If its already posted, ignore it. :)
And I think I suck at writing synopsis's... ![]() ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Team Medical Dragon Picture: http://i289.photobucket.com/albums/l...andas/logo.jpg Artist: Nagai Akira | Author: Nogizaka Taro Katou Akira is the assistant professor in the department of cardiothoracic surgery. Her aim is for the top, sitting in the professors chair, but its a long, hard way. For getting elected as professor, she decided to write a thesis about the hardest surgery that has never been successfully done before. The batista. But for her to collect good data, and actually have batista patients survive the surgery she needs the best, genius surgeon there is: Asada Ryotaro! Will Katou be able to keep the impulsive, arrogant Asada under control, or will the current professor kick him out of the hospital before she can complete her thesis? Tags: Drama, Ecchi, Research, Surgeons
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Narumon Z
Join Date: Feb 2008
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Hows that?
Futaba-kun Change Futaba Shimeru is living a normal life as a high school boy. He has a crush on a female classmate Misaki, and is active in his school's wrestling club. The only problem is that his family never told him about his family's hereditary genetic. Anyone in his family gets upset or stressed they change genders. Futaba Shimeru can't control his emotions and makes him switch gender when he gets excited or stressed and always seems to be in the wrong places when it happens. Can Futaba Shimeru keep his secret for long? Tag: Gender Bender, Action, Comedy, Romance |
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Narumon Z
Join Date: Dec 2008
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I saw that a lot of my favorite mangas were missing so I thought I'd try and contribute, but I might not be adequate. Please, bear with me.
Name: H2 Mangaka: Adachi Mitsuru Year: 1992 Tags: Shounen, Baseball, Slice of Life, Romance, Koushien, Love triangle Synopsis: When Kunimi Hiro finds out that he has a glass elbow he decides to choose a high school without a baseball club. He and his old friend Hideo hade together won the middle school championsip, Hiro as pitcher, Hideo as clean-up hitter, but now they have to part ways. But when Hiro finds out that his arm might not be as fragile as the doctor had told him Hideo sees it as God's will that they become rivals. The tension intensifies as Hiro realizes that he might yet have feelings for Hikari, his childhood friend whom now is dating Hideo, despite finding himself with warm feelings for another girl, namely the baseball loving Haruka. These things hardly faze Hiro as he sets out on his first of many challenges; to create a baseball team, against the iron will of the principal, whom hates the very thought of of high school baseball. It comes down to a duel where Hiro and Hideo have to face-off, if Hiro wins he gets his team, if he loses then all will be lost. With his future on the stake and hardly having trained in half a year, does Hiro stand a chance? --- Stamina's run out on me, boys. Will write more later and revise anything yeh think be needing revising. Last edited by Zakiel; 01-04-2009 at 09:34 PM. |
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