09-11-2008, 09:41 AM
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Poem: And Then It Happened
Tell me is this a good and makes you think what was I one. Or if think it needs some work and you still think what was I on.
I’ve been hanging around you for sometime I’ve been dancing around you for sometime Can you feel my weight While we sip the day away Can you feel my weight While we drink the day away Let’s get drunk on ourselves Let’s get drunk on ourselves Ooh and then it happened Ooh and then it happened Ooh you split me open so tenderly Ooh oh split me so perfectly This isn’t love between us Just a moment we share Don’t pretend that you care But I like the way you move me For some time now I like it in this place No I love it in this place Ooh and then it happened Ooh and then it happened You said you would kill me Hands wrapped around my neck I feel so alive Ooh and then it happened Ooh and then it happened You said you would kill me Hands wrapped around my neck I feel so alive
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09-11-2008, 01:52 PM
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Re: Poem: And Then It Happened
Eh, some ppl will like and others wont. I've learned to deal with critics.
 It doesn't matter though, I had fun writing it. 
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its constructive critisism and that somehow makes it all right.
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09-12-2008, 04:46 AM
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Re: Poem: And Then It Happened
Looks more like song lyrics - you written music to go with that?
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09-12-2008, 06:52 AM
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Re: Poem: And Then It Happened
Well then it's a song.
 Sometimes poems become songs. 
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