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Old 02-01-2013, 05:03 AM   #1 (permalink)
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heya people,

I started writing for a bit, and got a part of the first chapter, and the prologue.

for the people who are curious and don't know what is is about.
it is a story about a boy Némè, he gets into an orphanage on a very young age. Most of the story takes place when Némè is a 16-year old boy.

because of his high marks he gets into the royal special force military acedemy. they will be trained as special forces and are divided into three classes, mecha pilots, gunners, and swordman.

Némè is one of the few who gets into gunner AND mecha classes. during the story he will get a couple of missions to train. also he develops his very own mecha style. in the end there will be an attack from the enemy army on the school, because they found out that the school is training new forces.

it's my first novel so i hope you like it.
here's the prologue

It was already late when a dark colored van passed by, it drove through the street with a slightly too high speed. The van turned at the end of the street and drove back. They parked the van at the side of the street and two man in dark cloth came outside, they walked to the back of the van and opened the doors. One of the two men stepped into the van and gave some cans to the other man. After they got a couple of cans they walked to the house across the street. They didn’t say a word, opened the cans and they started to pour the liquid around the house. After a while all the cans were empty. One man putted a small box near the front door. They stepped into the van, started the engine and drove away again. Two minutes later the little box made a little sound, after that it exploded. The house started to burn. The flames raised after a couple of seconds the whole house was burning. The inhabitants screamed because of the fear. Their one year old baby started to cry loud out. The neighbors were curious about what was happening and stated to look at the burning house. The firefighters were extinguishing the fire pretty fast. After the fire had been extinguished one of the firefighters entered the burned down house. After ten minutes he came back with an man on his shoulder, and a baby in his arms. “the other people were already gone” he lied the people down on a blanked. The paramedics started to treat them and after a while the man came by. The baby also showed his first signs that he was alive.
Two months later
The man lived together with the baby in an apartment. And the situation was cooled down a bit already. He had got a new job. And they recovered quite well from the fire. On 14 July he woke up. He had overslept a couple of minutes and had to haste himself. He cared for his baby, ate some breakfast, brushed his teeth and putted on his coat. He searched for his car keys, after a while he founded them and walked downstairs. He threw his bag into the car and started it. As usual he drove in direction of the child crash. After he parked his car he noticed that he forgot to take the baby with him. He started the car again and drove away. On the intersection the traffic light jumped on red. He opened up his window because of the heat. After the light jumped on green again he heard a gunshot, his windshield broke, and his shirt was covered in blood. He lost control over the steering wheel and drove into a lamppost. After that he died because of his wounds.
16 July,
Some neighbors heard a baby scream for two days long, after which they decided to check out what was going on. After they rang the doorbell no one opened up the door. An old woman decided to call the police. After the police came they started to investigate the situation. They found out that the boy was the only survivor of the family, his mother, sister and his brother died two months ago in a fire accident. And his father passed away two days ago due an assassination which looked like a car accident. After they investigated everything they decided to put the boy into an orphanage.


please overlook the spelling and grammar mistakes. I'm going to work on that later on.

hope you like it

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