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Darker Than Black Rap

Uhh... If you saw the Introduction post, I rap and improve with every song. I made this a few months back after seeing Darker Than Black and the sequel loving every minute of it. It's from the view of Hei. And Here's my crappy summary if you haven't seen the anime for this song:

HTML Code:

https://soundcloud.com/majide-man/darker-than-black-produced-by

Edit A Redo with the feedback
https://soundcloud.com/majide-man/da...an-black-redux

Tell me what you think. (The end the vocals decline in volume and it was hard to fix the problem)

Lyrics:

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I like the lyrics man. I checked out some of your other stuff and it's not bad either. Just work a bit on the enunciation. I don't know if it's for style but you sort of start slurring words when you're rhyming fast. You need to blaze guns like Childish Gambino. Otherwise it's dope. Good luck!

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Quote:

Originally Posted by SeiyaManG (Post 1272493)

Heh, Thanks, and I dunno, I work on it. But I dunno if I can reach that Donald Glover level of style.

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Reminded me of nymh back when I played wow. I like it, you're good!

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Before I go into constructive criticism, allow me to praise you for your courage. Putting yourself out there, and sharing creativity is monumental.

Okay, as a fellow writer, I just have to mention a few things.
1.) Breath control. This is a must when performing. I can hear the deep breaths between bars. Throws of rhythm. (Can be solved by breathing techniques, and/or editing.)
2.) Riding the beat. A lot of rappers ignore this, but you can really wow the audience if you blend the flow with the beat. Ex. Jay, Em, Kool G Rap, get the picture.
3.) Great description, it brought back plenty of memories, but for those whom never seen the show, a better intro can solve that.

Once again, I like this track. I would like to hear more from you. Keep it up.

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UPDATED WITH REDO!!!

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We need a manga/anime where rap is the maintheme TBH. Maybe you could be one of the writers? :p