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Inspired by one of VivisQueen's reviews, I tried to write the story section WITHOUT including a plot summary. It feels a little thin, but I'm not convinced that's bad. Let me know what you all think.

ALSO, I omitted scores. Please guess in your Vivisections, or just for the hell of it. I will post the scores in the forum when the review enters its final stages of editing.

Story 5.5/10
Summer means blockbusters at the box office, with dumbed-down and juiced-up movies providing wonderful escapist entertainment for all who indulge. Adhering to this tried-and-true cinematic formula of tart-it-out, blow-it-up, and gun-it-down, PA Works' 2009 anime, Canaan, offers the kind of cheap thrills and impressive visuals that go particularly well with popcorn. While this show has its roots in a Type Moon game, it lands much closer to a live-action spy thriller than the typical visual novel-inspired anime. Differentiating itself from the psychological and magic-drenched mystery, Kaya no Kyoukai and the otaku-friendly cheesecake factory of Fate/Stay Night, this series sports a real-world scenario and a straightforward plot that does its best not to interfere with the show's big action set-pieces.

The first major arc of Canaan outlines a standard, but exciting political thriller in the tradition of Tom Clancy and Clive Cussler. A rousing speech by the US President, realistic armaments, and a toned-down approach to the show's science fiction elements paint a portrait of a world not so far removed from our own. Overall, the mundane setting works well with the story, since socio-political environment and geography reduce the amount of exposition necessary to keep the whole thing afloat. In this context, the main character's freakish nature and the fact that her abilities elude the grasp of modern science become worthy linchpins that bind the terrorists' machinations to the anime's theme of "you must take hold of your own life". Of course, the unoriginal evil-organization-versus-secret-government-agency conflict that flows from this setup offers ample opportunities for gunslinging eye candy which are, in the end, the best parts of what the series has to offer.

Unfortunately, this otherwise acceptable narrative stumbles when it decides the conflict that dominates the first ten installments of the series can't possibly hold the viewers' interest for the entire run. Instead, the main story comes to a sort of awkward climax around episode eleven, and then turns toward remedying the emotional turmoil of its namesake character. The "plot is just an extension of the lead" angle works for shows like Burst Angel, movies in the Bourne sequence, and to a lesser extent, Bubblegum Crisis 2040, but this anime--unlike the works mentioned before--doesn't tie its heroine's past to the events taking place in the present. Consequently, the resulting personal revelations toward the show's end ring a little hollow, and the final incident feels tacked-on in spite of any groundwork the writers lay earlier on.

Animation 8.75/10
Dear animation studios, if your name is not SHAFT, sit up and pay attention, because of the shows airing in the same season, only Bakemonogatari looks better. PA Works executed this thirteen episode series in a near-perfect manner: not a single cell of poor quality, no changes in proportion, and no clumsy movement. Detailed background artwork brings each of the show's locations to life whether it be bustling Hong Kong, a remote village of great importance to the plot, or unidentified jungle. But the incredible, Jason Bourne-like action sequences form the centerpiece of the anime's impressive visuals. Because the camera remains steady and works with the director's well-considered shot composition viewers can follow every scene, no matter how exciting or messy the fracas becomes. In particular, Canaan's acrobatic combat makes for some of the best set pieces this side of Princess Mononoke, and the second episode features a frenetic car chase through the streets of Hong Kong that viewers must to see to believe. When the plot quits navel-gazing and goes balls out, few TV series can match the fluid motion or the impressive choreography on display.

While the character designs lack the flair of other series with the same level of polish, this work does also shine between the explosions and volleys of small-arms fire. Expressive character animations light up the slower moments of each episode and help improve the sometimes limited characterization. Maria's facial contortions could fill a photobucket account, and Hakko, who is mute, comes brilliant to life through the incredible effort of her animators.

Sound 6/10
Due to its conventional setting and "realistic" characters, Canaan's voice cast receives precious few opportunities to make memories. Canaan and Alphard sound much like the viewer would expect, as does the innocent and optimistic Maria. No one overacts, and none of the performances grate on the ears, but only Yun Yun's voice actress, Haruka Tomatsu, manages to steal any scenes.

On the flip side, the music serves as an ideal compliment the series' action-packed content. The OP, "mind as Judgement" sets the mood for each episode, and is a catchy tune in its own right. It's English-language countdown and driving rock feel place it near the top my anime playlist. Though different in tone, the synth-heavy and otherworldly ED, "My Heaven" proves a good fit with the show's introspective overtones. In addition, Canaan's cast features an idol who's music weaves in and out of the main plot. As her concerts appear during real events occurring within the narrative, her music sounds tinny and hollow in most cases, which jibes with her outdoor performances on screen. The directors subvert this trope when they use her music as the soundtrack for episode two's car chase. The wonderful juxtaposition between her upbeat melody and the frantic driving heightens an already impressive scene to sublime. For its part, the remaining ambient music consists of generic orchestral numbers, heavy in horns and drums that build excitement and drama in all the right places without detracting from the events on screen.

Characters 7.5/10
While the plot may leave some viewers in the cold, the characters more than take up the slack. Complementing the dour and awkward Canaan, Maria bubbles with life and her constant whirlwind of expressions go a long way toward mitigating her whiny lack of self-confidence. Meanwhile, her partner, Minoru, acts beautifully as a story catalyst; his role as reporter allows the writers to insert exposition directly into the narrative without stopping its flow--a common failing of many TV series. While on the prowl for a scoop, his eyes-open approach to the events of the series makes him both sympathetic and admirable. Rounding out the group, the odd-jobbing Yun Yun adds a much needed breath of fresh air to the sometimes too-serious goings on. The brash Chinese girl's tireless salesmanship, considerable grit, and welcoming friendship quickly endear her to the audience. Without question, some of the most enjoyable scenes in each episode feature her smiling face. While these main leads start out interesting, their development is almost nonexistent in light of the catastrophic events of the story. The show relegates Maria's growth from a misty-eyed optimist into a realistic adult to the final installments, which denies her the chance to show her true mettle or determination until the last second. This post-narrative character development echoes Burst Angel's treatment of Meg, and in both cases, falls flat by leaving too much unsaid. Mirroring Kara no Kyoukai's stoic bombshell, Shiki Ryogi, Canaan's evolving personality and outlook have little effect on her icy facade until the season's closing credit sequence.

Across from the leads, the show places three believable but one-dimensional villains. Liang Qi and Cummings broadcast their motivations so forcefully that a viewer can understand them sans sound or subtitles. Conversely, the show obscures Alphard's past and raison d'etre in order to give her depth that frankly doesn't exist. As foils for the protagonists, this trio suffices, but they elicit little sympathy from the viewer. To more positive effect, the series also showcases an entertaining rogues gallery of secondary characters who help to humanize the excessive violence that cuts through the show like a knife. From Canaan's G-man handler to the minor villains who consume the opening episodes, each of these walk-ons fills his or her role perfectly. Of this supporting cast, the super-genki US President and Hong Kong's fastest taxi driver deserve special mention. Their over-the-top antics fuel some of the best segments in the show's first half.

Overall 7/10
In the end, Canaan adds up to just about the sum of its parts. Intense action, nifty plot twists, and a colorful cast carry the first three-quarters of this anime along at a good clip; and the last two episodes, while a little far from the original plot, feature enough combat and suspense to make the audience forget that the narrative comes a little unglued. True, the show lacks the powerful atmosphere and imagination present in Kara no Kyoukai or the blatant fan-service of Fate/Stay Night, but viewers looking for a serious, straightforward narrative should find this series' real-world setting and contemporary themes more appealing. Type Moon fans should check this one out for its tie-in to the visual novel and because it represents Nasu Kinoko's first writing for serial television. For us casual anime watchers, Canaan's cocktail of fluid visuals, accessible plot, and interesting characters provides an excellent summer distraction from ridiculous shounen combat and overblown school drama.

[KiraRin]

Originally Posted by ThePatches

Story X/10
Now, I don't play visual novels, but I do know what Type Moon is and the influence it has on the community. <-- and what influence is that? Most are written for perverts :p Canaan, airing in the summer of 2009 spun off a Wii visual novel written by Kinoko Nasu and Takashi Takeuchi. <-- sentence feels like its been cut short, I think it would read better as "Canaan, airing in the summer of 2009, is the spin off of a Wii visual novel written by... " Given that their other works, Kara no Kyoukai and Fate/Stay Night are cult hits among knowledgeable fans, it makes sense that another such of their properties has the potential to deliver a satisfying anime experience. <-- I'm not sure what you mean about "knowledgeable fans". Both shows are huge hits amongst most of the anime community Unlike its predecessors' supernatural elements and heavy psychological overtones <-- not sure FSN has psychological overtones, just lots of scantily clad girls with magic and swords :P, this series has the workman-like feel of a summer blockbuster: visually engaging in a conventional sense, a middling plot that tries too hard to be poignant, and a hard-rock theme song that sets the mood perfectly. In fact, I wouldn't be too surprised to see Michael Bay granted the rights to its live-action adaptation. <--- you're a sick, sick man :P

Canaan's otherwise acceptable narrative stumbles when it decides the bio-terrorism scheme that dominates the first ten episodes of the series can't possibly hold the viewers' interest for the entire run. Instead, the main story comes to a sort of awkward climax around episode 11, and turns turning toward remedying the emotional turmoil of its namesake character. The "plot is really an extension of the lead" angle works for shows like Burst Angel, the Bourne series, and to a lesser extent, Bubblegum Crisis 2040, but this anime doesn't as convincingly tie its heroine's past to the events taking place in the present. <-- I don't like the "doesn't as convincingly". Maybe "this anime is not as successful in tying..." Consequently, the resulting personal revelations in episodes twelve and thirteen ring a little hollow here. <-- I know its difficult, but you repeat "episode" a lot here.

On the positive side, the first major arc of Canaan outlines a standard [comma] but exciting political thriller in the tradition of Tom Clancy and Clive Cussler. It lacks the sense of wonder present in Higashi no Eden, but Canaan <-- italicise shares the former's "present" feel. <-- not seen either show, so not sure what you mean by present. In addition, the science fiction mumbo-jumbo that enables the plot sits only a step or two removed from reality, placing the events closer to the land of plausible than the countries of the fantastic. As such, Canaan's freakish nature and the fact that her abilities elude the grasp of modern science become a worthy linchpin that hold together the plot and the theme of the anime. The typical evil-terrorist-versus-secret-organization conflict that flows from this setup offers ample opportunities for acrobatic gunplay eye-candy, which is really all that anyone should ask of a summer action flick. <-- I know you didn't discuss the plot much, but I really feel like you didn't review the storyline either. It's like something is missing here from being able to score this section - you seem to have missed your own feelings here

Animation X/10
Dear animation studios, if your name is not SHAFT, sit up and pay attention. PA Works executed this thirteen episode series in a near-perfect manner: not a single cell of poor quality, no changes in proportion (except, of course, Yun Yun's chest, but those "lapses" are intentional), and no bad movement. Detailed background artwork brings each of the show's locations to life whether it be bustling Hong Kong, a remote village of great importance to the plot, or unidentified jungle. But the incredible, <-- not sure a comma is necessary here Jason Bourne-like action sequences define the anime's impressive visuals. The director leaves the camera steady and the shot composition well-considered so that--unlike in the American mega-hit movies--viewers can follow every scene, no matter how exciting or messy the fracas becomes. Canaan's acrobatic combat makes for some of the best set pieces this side of Princess Mononoke, and the second episode features a high-energy <-- how about frenetic? Good word :D car chase through the streets of Hong Kong that viewers will need to see to believe. When the plot quits navel-gazing and goes balls out, few TV series can match the excellence of its visuals or the coherence of its direction. In between explosions, the expressive character animations light up the slower moments.

Sound X/10
Due to its conventional setting and "realistic" characters, Canaan's voice cast receives precious few opportunities to make memories. Canaan and Alphard sound much like the viewer would expect, as does the innocent and optimistic Maria Oosawa. No one overacts, and none of the performances grate on the ears (I find Liang Qi annoying, but that might be because I hate her with a fire that burns like a thousand suns), but only Yun Yun's voice actress, Haruka Tomatsu, manages to steal any scenes. On the flip side, the music compliments the series' action-packed content. The OP, "mind as Judgement" sets the mood for each episode, and is a catchy tune in its own right (only "Parallel Hearts" from Pandora Hearts and the Saki theme songs matched its quality during the summer 2009 season). Oddly enough, the synth-heavy and otherworldly ED, "My Heaven" fits perfectly with the introspective overtones in the anime, making it a rare slow closer well-suited to a high-octane show. <-- I think you may want to re-jig this last sentence, as I read it as "closer" (as in getting closer to someone) and confused myself >.<

Characters X/10
While the plot may leave some (viewers?) cold, the characters more than take up the slack. Complementing the dour and awkward Canaan, Maria bubbles with life and energy and her constant whirlwind of expressions and actions go a long way to mitigate her whiny lack of self-confidence. <-- and, and, and Her partner, Minoru acts beautifully as a story catalyst; his role as reporter allows the writers to insert exposition into the narrative. In addition, his driving ambition and level head spur the sometimes misdirected and lethargic group of protagonists toward resolution on more than one occasion. Rounding out the group, the odd-jobbing Yun Yun adds a much needed breath of fresh air to the sometimes too-serious goings on. The brash chinese girl's tireless salesmanship, considerable grit, and welcoming friendship place her personality somewhere between Canaan and Maria. Without a doubt, her smiling face featured in each episode's more enjoyable scenes (at least the ones where bullets weren't flying, anyway). Sadly, due Maria's misty-eyed optimism, the show defers her development to the wake of its life-chaning events, much like Meg from Burst Angel. Canaan suffers a similar fate. Mirroring Kara no Kyoukai's stoic bombshell, Shiki Ryogi , the silver-haired gunslinger's minute changes in personality or outlook have little effect on her icy facade until the closing credits of the final episode.

Across from the leads, the show places three believable but one-dimensional villains. Two of the characters (Liang Qi and Cummings) broadcast their motivations so forcefully that a viewer can understand them even after turning off the sound and subtitles. Conversely, Canaan obscures Alphard's past and raison d'etre in order to give her depth that frankly doesn't exist. As foils for the protagonists, this trio suffices, but they elicit little sympathy from the viewer. The series also showcases a more entertaining rogues gallery of secondary characters who help to humanize all of the excessive violence that cuts through the show like a knife. From Canaan's G-man handler to the minor villains who consume the opening episodes, each of these walk-ons fits his or her role perfectly. Of this supporting cast, the super-genki US President and Hong Kong's fastest taxi driver deserve special mention. Their over-the-top antics drove some of the best segments in the show's first half.

Overall X/10
In the end, Canaan adds up to slightly less than the sum of its parts. The first three-quarters of this show contain enough thrills to warrant a watching, as the colorful cast and intense action carry the whole thing along at a good clip. And the last two episodes, while a little far from the original plot feature enough combat and suspense to make the audience forget that the narrative comes a little unglued. True, the show lacks the powerful atmosphere and imagination present in some of the writers' other works, but the more straightforward premise and narrative should appeal to viewers who dislike the heavy mystery and supernatural elements present in their other movies and series. Type Moon fans should check this one out for its tie-in to the visual novels. For us casual anime watchers, I recommend this series for its fluid visuals, accessible plot, and interesting characters.

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Maybe could use some restructuring to remove the repeated references to KnK? Not sure. <-- I think its good to have the comparisons. It helps the noobs like me decide if its worth watching ;P

H.

[ThePatches]

Thanks for the comments. I'll keep working on the story section. If need be, I'll throw in the synopsis, since clearly its lack threw SOMETHING off.

And WHAT? No scores?

[KiraRin]

Originally Posted by ThePatches

And WHAT? No scores?

I'm a lazy bitch. Sue me :p

H.

[babyeinstein12]

Originally Posted by ThePatches

So I am horrible with figuring things out and cannot ascertain how to cross words out. Therefore, the words that I think are superfluous are marked in red.

Oh, and unlike party pooper Kira over there, I'll play your little game XP

Story X/10 6? 6.5?
Now, I don't play play or read? visual novels, but I do know what Type Moon is and the influence it has on the community. Canaan, airing in the summer of 2009 spun off a Wii visual novel written by Kinoko Nasu and Takashi Takeuchi <a fragmented sentence. Also, what relation does the wii visual novel have to "Type Moon"??. Given that their <who is "their" referring to exactly?other works, Kara no Kyoukai and Fate/Stay Night[comma] are cult hits among knowledgeable fans, it makes sense that another such of their properties <"another such of their properties" sounds a little awkward. I would personally suggest "it would not be surprising if they were to deliver a satisfying anime experience as well." has the potential to deliver a satisfying anime experience. Unlike its predecessors' <Who's "it" exactly? supernatural elements and heavy psychological overtones, this series has the workman-like feel of a summer blockbuster: visually engaging in a conventional sense, a middling plot that tries too hard to be poignant, and a hard-rock theme song that sets the mood perfectly. In fact, I wouldn't be too surprised to see Michael Bay granted the rights to its live-action adaptation. This paragraph is kind of confusing to me. I don't see the need for the first sentence, or you could tie it in with the rest of the paragraph better.

Canaan's otherwise acceptable narrative stumbles when it decides the bio-terrorism scheme that dominates the first ten episodes of the series can't possibly hold the viewers' interest for the entire run. Instead, the main story comes to a sort of awkward climax around episode 11, and turns toward remedying the <I would get rid of "remedying"... it just clutters up the sentence emotional turmoil of its namesake character. The "plot is really an extension of the lead <lead character?" angle works for shows like Burst Angel, the Bourne series, and to a lesser extent, Bubblegum Crisis 2040, but this anime doesn't as convincingly tie its heroine's past to the events taking place in the present. Consequently, the resulting personal revelations in episodes twelve and thirteen ring a little hollow here.

On the positive side, the first major arc of Canaan outlines a standard but exciting political thriller in the tradition of Tom Clancy and Clive Cussler. It lacks the sense of wonder present in Higashi no Eden, but Canaan <<are you talking about the title or the character? For those who haven't watched the series (like me), it gets slightly confusing later on. shares the former's "present" feel. <<explain? In addition, the science fiction mumbo-jumbo that enables the plot sits only a step or two removed from reality, placing the events closer to the land of plausible than the countries of the fantastic. As such, Canaan's freakish nature and the fact that her abilities elude the grasp of modern science become a worthy linchpins that hold together the plot and the theme of the anime. <<How so? The typical evil-terrorist-versus-secret-organization conflict that flows from this setup offers ample opportunities for acrobatic gunplay eye-candy, which is <are really all that anyone should ask of a summer action flick.

Animation X/10 Oooh. 9.5? It can't be better than Shinkai, though.
Dear animation studios, <If you start with dear, I would prefer it be in letter format; otherwise, perhaps a simple "To all animation studios:" (or something similar) would suffice. if your name is not SHAFT, sit up and pay attention. <Ok, the "SHAFT" confused me at first. From the way it looks, the sentence emphasizes SHAFT, but SHAFT would be more worthy of a parenthesis here PA Works executed this thirteen episode series in a near-perfect manner: not a single cell of poor quality, no changes in proportion (except, of course, Yun Yun's chest, but those "lapses" are intentional), and no bad movement. Detailed background artwork brings each of the show's locations to life [comma] whether it be bustling Hong Kong, a remote village of great importance to the plot, or anunidentified jungle. But the incredible, <no comma Jason Bourne-like action sequences define the anime's impressive visuals. This sentence needs more oomph, like "But it is the incredible Jason Bourne-like action sequences that define the anime's impressive visuals." Perhaps this could be the opening sentence of a second paragraph in this section The director leaves the camera steady and the shot composition well-considered so that--unlike in the American mega-hit movies--viewers can follow every scene, no matter how exciting or messy the fracas becomes. Canaan's acrobatic combat makes for some of the best set pieces this side of Princess Mononoke, and the second episode features a high-energy car chase through the streets of Hong Kong that viewers will need to see to believe. When the plot quits navel-gazing and goes balls out, few TV series can match the excellence of its visuals or the coherence of its direction. In between explosions <literal explosions or explosions of fantastic action?, the expressive character animations light up the slower moments.

Sound X/10 7
Due to its conventional setting and "realistic" characters, Canaan's voice cast receives precious few opportunities to make memories. Canaan and Alphard sound much like the viewer would expect, as does the innocent and optimistic Maria Oosawa. No one overacts, and none of the performances grate on the ears (I find Liang Qi annoying, but that might be because I hate her with a fire that burns like a thousand suns), but only Yun Yun's voice actress, Haruka Tomatsu, manages to steal any scenes. <Ah! Run-on sentence.On the flip side, the music compliments the series' action-packed content. The OP, "mind <capitalize?as Judgement" sets the mood for each episode, and is a catchy tune in its own right <oh bleh. Bad sentence. Rework; perhaps combine in some way with the sentence before it.(only "Parallel Hearts" from Pandora Hearts and the Saki theme songs matched its quality during the summer 2009 season) <the little parenthesized statement isn't needed imo. Oddly enough, the synth-heavy and otherworldly ED, "My Heaven" [comma] fits perfectly with the introspective overtones in the anime "with the anime's introspective overtone", making it a rare slow closer well-suited to a high-octane show <could you explain how the "slow closer" warrants the "oddly enough?" at the beginning of the sentence?.

Characters X/10 7.5
While the plot may leave some cold, the characters more than take up the slack. Complementing the dour and awkward Canaan, Maria bubbles with life and energy [comma] and her constant whirlwind of expressions and actions go a long way to mitigate her whiny lack of self-confidence. Her partner, Minoru acts beautifully as a story catalyst; his role as reporter allows the writers to insert exposition into the narrative. In addition, his driving ambition and level head spur the sometimes misdirected and lethargic group of protagonists toward resolution on more than one occasion. Rounding out the group, the odd-jobbing Yun Yun adds a much needed breath of fresh air to the sometimes too-serious goings on <circumstances? happenings?. The brash Chinese girl's tireless salesmanship, considerable grit, and welcoming friendship place her personality somewhere between Canaan and Maria. Without a doubt, her smiling face featured in each episode's more enjoyable scenes (at least the ones where bullets weren't flying, anyway).<Huh? this sentence was cut short? Sadly, due Maria's misty-eyed optimism, the show defers her who, Yun yun? development to the wake of its life-changing events <be clearer. I have no idea what you mean by this sentence., much like Meg from Burst Angel. Canaan suffers a similar fate. Mirroring Kara no Kyoukai's stoic bombshell, Shiki Ryogi , the silver-haired gunslinger's minute changes in personality or outlook have little effect on her icy facade until the closing credits of the final episode. <???? I'm sorry, but this sentence too makes no sense... With this paragraph in general, I'm seeing a lot of description, but you don't really elucidate to us how you feel about it. Did the show succeed with their characterization?

Across from the leads, the show places three believable but one-dimensional villains. Two of the characters (Liang Qi and Cummings) broadcast their motivations so forcefully that a viewer can understand them even after turning off the sound and subtitles. Conversely, Canaan <how about "the show"? At first, I thought you were talking about the characterobscures Alphard's past and raison d'etre in order to give her a depth that frankly doesn't exist. As foils for the protagonists, this trio suffices, but they elicit little sympathy from the viewer. The series also showcases a more entertaining rogues gallery of secondary characters who help to humanize all of the excessive violence that cuts through the show like a knife. From Canaan's G-man handler to the minor villains who consume the opening episodes, each of these walk-ons fits his or her role perfectly. Of this supporting cast, the super-genki US President and Hong Kong's fastest taxi driver deserve special mention. Their over-the-top antics drove constituted? composed? comprised? some of the best segments in the show's first half.

Overall X/10 7?
In the end, Canaan adds up to slightly less than the sum of its parts. The first three-quarters of this show contain enough thrills to warrant a watching, as the colorful cast and intense action carry the whole thing along at a good clip <Relate the two clauses of this sentence into a more "lucid whole". ;). And the last two episodes, while a little far from the original plot [comma] feature enough combat and suspense to make the audience forget that the narrative comes a little unglued <a little awkward. I suggest something like "..enough combat and suspesne that the audience will overlook a narrative crumbling a little at the edges.". True, the show lacks the powerful atmosphere and imagination present in some of the writers' <perhaps remind us who they were by saying their names again other works, but the more straightforward premise and narrative should appeal to viewers who dislike the heavy mystery and supernatural elements present in their other movies and series <not a huge fan of this last clause. Perhaps "should appeal to viewers inexperienced in heavy mystery and the supernatural.". Type Moon fans should check this one out for its tie-in to the visual novels. For us casual anime watchers, I recommend this series for its fluid visuals, accessible plot, and interesting characters.meh ending. It sounds like a good anime, so give it the conclusion it deserves!

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Maybe could use some restructuring to remove the repeated references to KnK? Not sure.

How were my guesses?

[ThePatches]

Originally Posted by babyeinstein12

How were my guesses?

Thanks. Your scores are VERY close to mine. I will re-work a lot of those problem sentences.

For your education, I'm going to address some of your comments that came from general lack-of-knowledge (or at least in equal parts to my obtuse writings):

1. Type Moon made the Wii game.
2. SHAFT is an anime studio. All in caps.
3. The song title "mind as Judgement" is the verbatim title, as I understand it. Yes, the artist clearly doesn't know about capitalization. Or thinks she's cool for ignoring it.

[ThePatches]

I completely overhauled the story section. I'm gonna sit on it for a day or so and then give it one final polish. One more outside look before I do so wouldn't be turned down, though...

[babyeinstein12]

Never mind that - GIVE US THE SCORES. NOW.

;p

Oh, and I'll give a quick mini-Vivisection tonight if I have time. I've been so incredibly busy; need to get back to Plato now... sigh...

[ThePatches]

Originally Posted by babyeinstein12

Never mind that - GIVE US THE SCORES. NOW.

;p

Oh, and I'll give a quick mini-Vivisection tonight if I have time. I've been so incredibly busy; need to get back to Plato now... sigh...

There are your scores, missy. I overhauled the story section, because it was clear I was a little too confused. I hope you appreciate it.