Re: Sky Crawlers
I love obligatory smilies, they make me feel warm and fuzzy. Thanks for the hard work.
However obviosly my writing is pirfect, because I know it's pirfect and you're just an eleetist jerk who cant aprreciate my unique stile.
I made little effort to edit either tenses or passive voice and just stuck to technical errors rather than stylistic errors. I'll have to get into the habit of scanning for those as well.
I enjoy ranting, and apparently I write much more naturally when doing so, but I find it difficult to be ranty when I at least somewhat enjoyed what I'm ranting about. Unless I'm passionate to the point of obsession, or I really hated it, I don't have the fire in my belly to be witty. Anyone can find things to complain about in anything, but it wouldn't make much sense if I ranted about all the bad things in x category then gave it a score of 7 or 8. I guess I could have ranted in the story section as I scored it low, but I thought it felt more deserving of a yawn rather than an angry fist.
Working in my voice into things I liked will be a challenge. I'll edit this later, I don't feel too motivated at the moment.
Whatever the case may be, it seems I should stick exclusively to an informal style - the best I've gotten with the formal after repeated attempts is "pretty good". Informal is more fun anyway!