Originally Posted by therik
Biggest issue I had with this review is that some of your comments when talking about the show seem to contradict your rating. In story, you say "this bizarre masterpiece", in Overall you comment that it is "Outstanding for so many reasons" and then give it 2/10 overall. Outstanding masterpieces don't get 2 out of 10.
I understand you're trying to get across Midori
's technical accomplishments at the same time as your complete distaste for it, but I think less of the former and more of the latter would make your review more coherent as a whole (and probably add in a lot more bite). You really need to get across quite how comprehensively the negatives overwhelmed the positives.
Once you've had a look at Vivi's changes I might see if there's some grammar left to nitpick, but that's my main point for now.
I have to agree with therik's first comment, but not necessarily his second. You can't call something a masterpiece and then score it low. However, I think I understand where you're coming from. My suggestion? Believe in yourself.
I think you call this work a masterpiece because you're convinced there's some actual deep content in the show that eluded you and therefore can't bring yourself to declare that it failed... And then you do. Stick up for your viewpoint. From where I sit, it sounded like this anime set out to achieve something and then collapsed under the weight of its disturbing visuals and unrealized characters. If that's the case, give it a 2/10 out of conviction. Add a little language that indicates that Midori dropped the ball and then stand firm. Sure, someone might come along and claim that this show was brilliant, but until he makes you understand it and you change your opinion, stick to the one you've got.
P.S. I know, I know, I have to put something up in response. I'm going to go watch Penguin Musume Heart
again (RIGHT NOW) and start my work on the review for it. Keep your shirt on... Or not. You're in to ecchi.