Re: Barefoot Gen
Lol. Lack of confidence when you first get into writing is natural. You don't automatically know what is bad and what is good or what is undesirable etc. You just trust your instincts and the advice of people who are more experienced.
Eventually, you just come to recognise these things yourself. That's the only difference between you and a more experienced writer (urgh, did that sound as patronising to you as it did to me? :/) Anyway, I like your style, and I like most of what you've done here. I think therik's advice is good. Good luck with the edit!
Looking forward to more.
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