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Originally Posted by Pippin4242
Well yeah, but it'd make the whole of the first book fairly boring if people realised that the power I'm alluding to came directly from the very first game he's shown playing with. Would you really like me to add that in? I'm obviously still on shaky ground here, and I'd really like to get the hang of it, because then I can edit the rest of my entries without bothering people too much. I've an awful lot of relatively unusual manga I've read too, and I'm looking forward to helping out as much as I can over the coming weeks. ^^
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You don't necessarily need to mention what game it is - a lot of avoiding giving away to many spoilers is just trying to think of another way to put it - and sometimes it can actually add dramatic effect.
For example; say there's a group of four friends, bob, terry, fred and george. At the end of volume 2 of this imaginary 25 volume manga, terry gets run over by a car full of clowns and dies. Say this plot point is realy important to the development of the story but you don't want to give away exactly what happens and to who. You could word it like: but one day the group is torn apart by a tragic event. How will they cope after that fateful day, and will their friendship be strong enough to weather the storms ahead?
That's a ridiculous example, but yeah, you get the gist :)
I'll stop rambling now. I've had an edit of your synopsis, though mostly it is just slight re-wording and re-structuring.
Motou Yuugi is a shy teenage boy who lives above a game shop with his grandfather. Finding himself constantly lost in his own world filled with games and puzzles, Yuugi is both isolated and rather immature. His only friend is Mazaki Anzu, and while he is attracted to her, she insists on treating him like a younger brother. One day, a pair of bullies ruins one of his most prized puzzles and Yuugi is naturally devastated. However, he soon finds that his obsession has at long last paid off when he utilises his skills and unlocks a special hidden power. Now, through the use of his mysterious punishment games, Yuugi can finally get even with the school bullies, and maybe take his own brand of justice out into the wider world.
Does this still seem right in relation to the manga? (obviously with this bit "However, he soon finds that his obsession has at long last paid off when he utilises his skills and unlocks a special hidden power." I'm going with what I've gathered from what's been said without giving too much away)
