Do you want people to comment the anime itself or the review? Since I am pretty sure enough people will comment on the anime already, I will rather help you with something which I think seems to be needed.
First of all, your synopsis overuses the name "Tsukasa". I will rewrite it roughly to make it look better and more fluent:
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Have you ever felt totally absorbed by an online game? Would you be able to stop before it's too late? This happens in .hack//SIGN when Tsukasa, the story's main lead, suddenly can't log out and is stuck in the online world simply called "The World". Somehow Tsukasa obtains a certain powers while being stuck in The World which is normally not allowed to other players, such as traveling between realms. However, in the real world, the player who is Tsukasa, falls into a coma and now he can't log out just like all the other users. In addition, Tsukasa can feel the world in a way no other users can. For him the world is alive and he can smell, touch and taste as if the world to him was real.
These powers were however gained through the expense of his real memories as Tsukasa can no longer remember the life he had in the real world. This eventually leads others to believe Tsukasa is related to hackers and they try to capture him. As the story progresses, Tsukasa mysteriously gains a powerful spell which allows him to summon a monster that protects him even when he is not aware he summoned the monster itself. This leads to Tsukasa not only to disbelieve himself but also undermines the trust he had to others. His only hope seems to lie within a mysterious girl floating over a bed hidden in a realm which only Tsukasa can enter. He strongly wishes her to wake up but there seems to be other forces that are trying to stop him doing so. All seems to lead back to a strange woman that tells Tsukasa to forget about his past. Tsukasa doesn't know what to do, will he be forced to stay in the game forever or will be able to eventually go home?
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I assume you aren't a native speaker of English and that is fine, however, for the readability for for others my version of your synposis is just a suggestion of how it could look like to add more fluency to it.
As for your description of the plot, you should flesh it out a lot more. Now we just have a plain opinion of what you thought about it. You should also consider to merge the synopsis with the plot part. A synopsis is seldom needed as such and if one is needed it should be very brief. Yours is quite lengthy and explains the plot in deep detail. Try to break it up somewhere you explain Tsukasa can't log out and remove everything in the middle and just let it lead back to the final question, will Tsukasa ever be able to log out or will he be stuck in the game forever?
Also, flesh out the characters. Explain them, how are they, how do they look, what are their strengths and weaknesses? Try to make things throughly when you write a review. Everything doesn't need to be told in detail but give the reader a rough view of how the show is like. I think you did it fairly well for the animation but all others areas fail. Why is the music the best music ever? What type of genre is it? How well does the music function to the anime it's composed to? etc.